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| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Flow & Clarity | #4 | 3.929 | 3.929 |
| Overall | #6 | 4.012 | 4.012 |
| Concepts & Originality | #8 | 4.107 | 4.107 |
| Adherence to Theme | #10 | 4.000 | 4.000 |
Ranked from 28 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
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I want to preface this by saying, I am not trying to hate. My intention is to give thoughtful, honest feedback so that every story I rate has something the author can walk away from and both appreciate and work on. If I sound rude that is entirely accidental, I'm only intending to give helpful, honest criticisms and praises.
I really liked the imagery of the vampire before and after sucking the blood from Darguth. The way you described her was perfectly creepy. The transition for Darguth was also done really well. I'd say my only criticism would be some pacing hiccups in some places, specifically right as Darguth joins the fight. Overall though it was a good story and an enjoyable read!
I appreciate the criticism and agree entirely about the pacing. Ideally I’d have more time to show Darguth turning. Maybe if I ever flesh this out into something more 😎
Nice twist ending! Overall had a great time!
I like good vamp stories. I write them too. That dwarf transformed quickly. Nice read.
10/10
The themes you chose and the characters are on point!
Clever take on the prompt and fun ending twist. I enjoyed this!
I enjoyed this story and how is twisted being allies. I liked how the descriptions shifted from being about the location and the things around him to being about violence and blood once he was turned. I think the one quibble I have is that I think this story would have felt a little smoother written in first instead of third. Either way it was a good time (just not for Darguth).
Funny story: Darguth is one my good friends’ go-to names for all of his dwarf characters for the past 25 years or so.
Haha. That is great. Glad that he can now live on eternally!
I enjoyed this one a lot, it really felt like the beginning of a beautiful draining- I mean friendship.
I enjoyed this one a lot, it really felt like the beginning of a beautiful draining- I mean friendship.
An interesting twist on what counts as an ally. I suppose that if they ask first, all's fair :-)
I mean, they both thought the other was an ally.
I loved your ending!
Thanks! As expected it was a bit rushed and some liberties were taken with how vampires work haha, but in one page what can you do?
Not a bad yarn at all. Good flow, easy to grasp, filled with enough familiar tropes such as Scottish inspired dorf, big dumb hungry ogres and (eventually) luscious lady bat. Pretty good stuff. The bold body text was a bit strong, though.
Great writing and hit the brief also. Well done!